2019-07-25 17:00 供稿单位: 新航道 原创作者:章跃
As is shown in the chart, the magazine sales per person in the 5 countries (A, B, C, D, and E) changed between the two historical years, and they are unlikely to stay unchanged in the future. [可以用宽泛总结的方式写开头，但是一定一定要宽泛，不要抢了conclusion的内容]
【分组原则：Countries A, B and C一组：下降】
In Countries A, B and C, the year of 2010 witnessed a drop compared with the year of 2000 [用来表述比较关系的状语要写清楚], and it is predicted that the year of 2020 will see a drop on the 2010’s level[用来表述比较关系的定语要写清楚]. ←总，分 →The highest sales were in Country A and in 2000, and lowest sales is likely to be in Country C in 2020; however, the sales will still stay above an annual number of 30.
【分组原则：Countries D and E一组】
By marked/stark[表示程度的形容词是小作文的词汇关键] contrast, the year of 2010 saw that magazines became more popular in Countries D and E, as the sales per person grew by 5 in both of the countries. According to the projection[于是后面可以用will], Country D’s number will, by the time of 2020, be 5 larger than in 2010, andCountry E will witness a slight decrease of 5 on the 2010’s level [用来表述比较关系的定语要写清楚]. In addition, it is notable that the sales were relatively low in these two countries, as they were around 20 and 10 respectively.
Overall, countries A, B and C were vastly different from Countries D and E in terms of the sales and the pattern of change, and their futures will be significantly different. [笼统写]
Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers. Others think that it is dependent on the attitude of the students.
Discuss both of the views and give your opinion.
[我们需要一个简洁快速高效的开头，防止给读者（考官）造成疲劳感和引起反感] Many people believe instructors play an important role in students’ educational achievement. However, the right minds and hearts of students are more decisive.
Good instructors are able to recognize learners’ strengths and weaknesses, whereas students themselves may be unable to do so. Knowing the talents and flaws, teachers therefore could offer advice accordingly // corresponding advice. In addition, well-qualified teachers are professionals, who are experienced and possess expert knowledge, compared with students. As students learn from their experience and gain the knowledge, they learn from the best. In addition, students may look up to a highly competent and charismatic teacher, and having students’ admiration is important.
However, [首先，故意针对上一段中的内容一] teachers’ advice is not necessarily followed. Students may disagree with teachers’ evaluation of them and disobey [其实在说明是“态度问题”的词] teachers’ instructions. In other words, if students haveresistance to [其实在说明是“态度问题”的词]the right opinions and directions, they are unlikely to make educational achievements.[然后，故意针对上一段中的内容二] In addition, teachers’ knowledge and experience may not be appreciated [其实在说明是“态度问题”的词]. For example, a knowledgeable and experienced professor may be neglected by a class of students uninterested in learning. That is to say, teachers are useless or valueless unless students truly enjoy [其实在说明是“态度问题”的词] learning. [最后，故意针对上一段中的内容一] Lastly, an admirable teacher may be unable to many students change the disinterest in learning as a stubborn habit.
To sum up, good teachers play a significant role in students’ academic performance. However, educational attainments are subject to students’ attitude.